第1个回答 2013-04-28
你太中式英语,如果你需要帮助你纠正,请提供您的中国的意义!
以下是我的分析,仅供参考:
一个商业公司的负责人认为,他成功的漫长道路上是非常有趣的。
修订的:一个头业务公司认为他的成功非常有趣的很长的路要走。
这个地方没有头,没有指定。你觉得...... ADJ。结构,可以使你的措辞简单明了的。成功之路是一个“成功之路”,介词的固定用法。
2。二十年前,他雇了几个experianced helpers.One他们已经成立了一个世界纪录。
修订:二十年前,他受聘几个的experianced的助手,其中一个已创造了世界纪录。
帮手是指帮手(多次表示做家务帮手),是比较合适的使用助手。 ,身后一个非限制性定语从句和简要说明一个assisstant。
3。他选择了一个免费的,废弃的停车场,他的车库。
公园可以说是“停车场”的意思,但你使用停车场,但中国。这非常确定。
4。在这短短的时间里,他是非常worride贼有大的诱惑steal.So他去当地派出所每个month.the贼他焦急地希望。
更正:在这短短的时间中,他被担心盗贼强烈愿望,将进行偷窃,所以他每月去当地派出所,焦急地期待小偷被逮捕。 “年内年内英寸...更好。盗贼的强烈愿望会进行偷窃的盗贼面前(小偷复数)不明确不指定,因为目前尚不清楚什么是小偷,如果仍然有很多盗贼吗?进行偷窃这是完整的,即使你不说,完全是因为中国人能听懂英语,但应该是比较清楚。焦急地期待着小偷可能被逮捕,个人认为这是一个很好的选择期望,说他一直在寻找,期待,伴随着形容他的心理。被捕被捕的平均。
这应该只是一个开始,有可能是一些个别的字仍然可以被讨论。然而,你的文章一般来说中国的英语作文的原则:最简单的单词和句子来表达尽可能完整(适当的)的意思。
第2个回答 2006-03-04
The manager of a business company gelt that his long way to success was veyy interesting.Twenty years ago,he employed several experianced sessters,one of whom had set up a world record .He chose a free and deserted car park as a garage.In that short time ,he was very worried about the thief who had sthong temption to sheal.So he went to the local station every month,anxious to catch the thief.
第3个回答 2006-03-04
A boss in a business company felt that it's pretty interesting to share the way how he got success. 20 years ago, he hired several practical persons to be his assistants, and one of whom had ever broken the world record. He finally chose a free, disused parking stadium as his workshop. In that days, he always felt worried that the thieft would come and steal something. Thus, he went to the the police office once a month.
第4个回答 2006-03-04
helpers换一下,改为assistants怎么样?
car park 也不妥,太口语化了,改为parking space吧
the thief was hoped anxiously by him.这句话感觉怪怪的 小偷存在吗这很关键
第5个回答 2006-03-04
The boss of a business company felt his long way to success was very interesting.Twenty years ago,he employed several experienced assistants,one of whom had ever broken the world record.He chose a free,discarded park as his workshop.During those days,he felt very worried with the thief who had strong temptation.So he went to the local police station once a month and hoped the thief could be captured as soon as possible.