求高手帮忙高中作文修改，以及给意见，词汇替换之类的。110字左右。

Question

Dear Li Ming, I am very sad that listen you have failed in terminal test because indulge in online game-playing.I am writting this letter of my intention of persuading you reduce time of game-playing and hard work hard for study. Indugle in surffing，having a great number of disease for our body not only in mentality but also in physical.First of all, game-playing let your waste lot you money that you could have bought books or other object.What’s worse, game-playing is occupy time of life which you can use to make useful things ,you don’t have enough time to study or to do exercise and may be led you don’t success graduate.The last but no the least,online game-playing would reduce relate to contact with you friend. I would be happy if you could relaize surfing’s diease and take more time to study.wish my best to you. Yours Sincerely, Zhang xin .

Answer 1

英语作文：
Dear Li Ming,
I am very disappointed to hear that you failed in your final exams for the term resulting from your game-playing indulge.
In my advices, game-playing indulge is harmful to you both mentally and physically. It wastes not only your time but also your money with which you can buy books and other useful things for your school life.
As we know, school life is unique and invaluable to us. We should cherish the time rather than spending on the useless game-playing. You can take your spare time to do exercises or talk to your friends. Otherwise, you may lose your friends because of game-playing.
Hope you can take the lesson from this exams failure and turn to a right way for your success
.All the best.
Your friend Zhang Xin.

Answer 2

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