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Question

有的人喜欢一个人学习，有个人喜欢和别人一起学习，两种学习习惯的好处。你倾向于哪种，为什么。
when asked which is the best way to study. different people will give different answers. some people like to study alone. however, others prefer to study with a companion.
those people who hold the first opinion believe that it is more effective to study alone than study with a companion. in their eyes, it provides a better surrounding for them to learn more knowledge and easy ti remember them deeply. however ,others think differently. in their opinions,they can gain more help from others if they studying with a companion. besides, they can discuss somethings about their sutdies, it is benefit to each other.
both two choices have their own advantages. whichever choice one makes, he/she has his/her own reasons. weighing up these two choices, i prefer th latter one. for one reason, i don't like to stay alone, much less to study alone. for another, i enjoy discussing anything about studying with others. i can learn extra knowledge from others. considering these ,i think i should prefer to study with a companion.

Answer 1

when asked which one is the best way to study. different people will give different answers. Some people like to study alone. However, others prefer to study with a companion.
Those people who hold the first opinion believe that it is more effective to study alone than study with a companion. in their eyes, it provides a better surrounding for them to learn more knowledge and easily remember it deeply. However ,others think differently.In their opinion,they can gain more help from others if they study with a companion. Besides, they can discuss something about their sutdies and they can benefit from each other.
Both choices have their own advantages. whichever choice one makes, he/she has his/her own reasons. weighing up these two choices, I prefer thE latter . For one reason, I don't like to stay alone, much less than to study alone. for another, i enjoy discussing anything about studying with others. i can learn extra knowledge from others. considering these ,i think i should prefer to study with a companion.

Answer 2

When asked which is the best way to study.，different people will give different answers. Some people like to study alone【 while】 others prefer to study with a companion.
Those people who hold the first opinion believe that it is more effective to study alone than 【to】study with a companion. In their eyes, it provides a better surrounding for them to learn more knowledge and【 it is easier for them to】 remember 【things】more deeply. However ,others think differently. In their opinions,they can gain more help from others if they 【study】 with a companion. 【besides改为In addition,】 they can discuss 【something】about their sutdies, 【which is beneficial】 to each other.
Both two choices have their own advantages. whichever choice one makes, he/she has his/her own reasons. Weighing up these two choices, i prefer 【the latter 】. For one reason, i don't like to stay alone, much less to study alone. For another, i enjoy discussing 【almost】anything about studying with others. I can learn extra knowledge from others【at the same time】. Considering these 【aspects】 ,I think I should prefer to study with a companion.
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